Mar 06, 2023
OK, you asked me to roast you, so here it is: There are some unnecessary comments in this chapter. Also, this is an isekai.
In all seriousness, I haven’t found any big flaws with this so far. It was a bit weird describing Snazzy as having a jaw in the same chapter in which you emphasized he has no bones, but I know what you were going for, and I’m not sure I have a better word for it than jaw.
Also, I probably would have given up after the first chapter if it weren’t for the comment that the rest isn’t as horny. Not trying to belittle anyone for what they like, but the fetish isn’t my cup of tea.
