Aug 21, 2022
Okay so I did not realize that this is the end =))
For a late entry, this one has been a banger. The worldbuilding is incredibly solid, yet pretty simple take on a shounen school setting. The prose is nice and easy to breeze through, while the formatting is hands down one of the best I’ve seen on the site. Good bonus point for presentation.
If there’s one weak point I have to nitpick, it would be the characters, but not for the normal reasons why it would be a weak point. Your characters are extremely colorful and memorable, but on the other hand for most of the time they’re… just assholes, even with the teachers. This is, imo, the only case where the school setting hurts you more than it helps you, whereas something like a normal society or an adventure guild would be a better fit.
In the end though, this is still a very solid entry. Does it fit the prompt? Kinda I guess? Does it have amazing quality? Hell yeah.
