Mar 03, 2025
To:Moon
i appreciate you finishing!
Yeah there are some glaring issues I will be able to fix when the contest ends. i think the MC narration was too repetitive like you said, especially in the beginning.
On a rewrite, i think i will make the world system/light parallel more clear and set so it’s easier to follow as well. And eliminate unnecessary inner monologues. i think if the world like you said, showed a clearer example of how memory effected others, it will make it more immersive. Hopefully, i can continue it to the 2nd volume and fix these issues. Thanks for the feedback it means a lot.
