Jun 21, 2023

To:Kaisei

I'm going ALL IN on the star motif!! Is the star-reading slightly gibberish? ... probably. Is it going to be a fun battle against star-crossed fate? I hope so 😁

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Jun 21, 2023

To:Touya

Heyo!! Thanks for taking the time to check this out! :D always appreciated, but never required!
I'm honestly really glad people are connecting to the characters (especially Jun!!) He's going to be a bit of a royal goof of a main character 😂 but I'm glad showing his inner thoughts helps him be relatable!! 💕

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Jun 20, 2023

To:Fake_Saffron

MAL can be a tough place 😖 I feel that! If the negative feedback has got you kinda sour about the whole project, I understand the desire to let it go and maybe start something fresh. That's totally valid.
But I also think if you personally like the story, and have inspiration to pursue it, and still enjoy writing it...then I encourage you to write just to have fun writing!! I feel like this story's just begun!
Whatever you choose, I'm sending you good vibes either way ☺️ I think your writing is really well done. And I sincerely hope that you'll keep writing! (whether it's this story, or another one, or something that you don't even post online!)

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Jun 20, 2023

Shiraito not the sake!! 🤣 Not with the high schoolers around!

Nao is their lucky charm though! That's absolutely adorable 🥰 Victory celebration time! Also the suggestion for Fox as his nickname! That's perfect! 🦊

I loved him holding Nao's hand to give her confidence! A brave move on Takashi's part, but one that led to everyone holding hands in prayer in a nice moment. But still, Takashi and Nao got to hold hands!! Eee!! And they're going to the festival together! ✨

I'm hoping Inari will be pleased 🤞hoping!!

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Jun 20, 2023

To:Kitsune

Yep!! World building and a few interpersonal mix-ups are next up on the list! I don't want being a rich elf to be TOO easy for Jun 😂 some unveiling of rumors and hijinks to come!

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Jun 20, 2023

To:Shulox

Cursed perhaps? But it's not quite as it seems! ☺️ I aim to explain it more in the chapters this week!! We're still in the same story riding sea horses 🤣 there's about to be some very silly sections coming up.

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Jun 20, 2023

I definitely thought there was a time loop for a second there! 🤣 With the sun turning backwards, I'm still wondering if there's some time magic at play here!

BUZZLOOKANALIEN is a beautiful line, by the way 😌 And dropping Breaking Bad references? Poor Jack is confusing Emmett more and more by the minute 😄

"Is Arthur gonna survive or not?"
"Dude I'm right here ಠ_ಠ "

...I got so distracted by that dramatic knock, I almost forgot. The parents are alive! And here!! Thankfully Jack/Arthur has his memories but this is gonna be an interesting conversation!

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Jun 20, 2023

To:Blues01l

No trouble at all! And please, I hope my feedback didn't offend you either 🙏 I believe that authors have the right to their creative vision, and if they want to explore dark topics, they can! But I'm also older now 🤣 and I remember having very dark days when I was a teenager. When I would read things (back then), it would influence me, and sometimes in a dangerous way! I know the internet is huge and there's no stopping it, but small warnings go a long way ☺️ Anyway, thanks for letting me ramble!! And thank you for sharing your writing! ✨

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Jun 20, 2023

To:Lucid Levia

👀 ~

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Jun 20, 2023

To:Katsuhito

Claire is absolutely using magical cheat codes 🤣 but her magic hacks may or may not be why she's slightly in trouble...? 😏
But hey if you've got exams coming up, I'm sending you good luck and good vibes!! (Wait, are there exams in the summer? Okay, I might be sending luck for your *future* exams. But still, the luck is sent!! 🧧)
Merchant bozo puttin' down a rumor, Jun's gonna find out more! These next three sections link together, so I wanted to post them back to back ☺️

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Jun 20, 2023

I was not expecting to follow-up Alice screaming with ... "Hentai communism." I feel a little dirty even typing that 😭 oh no

But oh man, that panic of seeing someone go into anaphylaxis. That stays with you. I'm hoping Alice is okay and not like...living in a hospital as a chemo patient her whole life
(╥﹏╥) stop I don't want these feels.

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Jun 20, 2023

Oooh, Alice thought it might be a kiss 🤣 I love the change in expectations!! She's finally the one feeling a bit flustered!

Oh shoot. Wait black hat is like...legit a criminal. I thought he was just an in-game annoyance, but yeah that's like the stuff that gets you on a List. I understand the documentary approach now.

But oh no!! Alice! Did her helmet melt 😱 ahhhh

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Jun 20, 2023

Epileptic dance 🤣🤣 yep. I'll admit. I would've tricked my friends into eating the paralyze mushrooms too.

That lick tho 😏

100% imagining spawn camping bases in minecraft by surrounding them in obsidian and lava blocks 😭 rip new players. And yep. Do not dig straight down.

Man, I'm glad Jason's having fun though 💕

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Jun 20, 2023

I wasn't ready for that chapter title. Help. I spat out my drink irl

Oh frick Jason lives in a really not good future huh? 😭 Face masks to breathe? Now I'm worried about the world *outside* the game too.

They're eating the little hopbunnies on a PvP graveyard. Metal af.

"like braxy" oooh!! The burn! Jason hitting where it hurts.

Though oh! Oh! Real life stuff! Getting to know about Jason's background, and having Alice cheer on his first short film. 💕 Okay, it's really cute!!

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Jun 20, 2023

I'm imagining the boss intro now:

ABRAXAS
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Absolute Unit of a Chicken

If I saw that tagline on an actual game boss, I'd be so happy 🐔

Also if Alice ever has to stay at an inn in-game, she's going to pay for a whole deluxe room for Braxy. ✨ While Jason will have to stay in the stables.

But! Some hints as to Alice's life outside the game!! Oooh!

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