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Mario Nakano 64

It's a me. I'm an aspiring light novel writer hoping to one day see my works in anime form. I hope that my works at least brighten up your day and give you something to look forward to.

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Oct 03, 2025

How could West Brom even win the champion's league if they aren't even qualified for it. Best they could get is Europa league, but only if they win the FA cup.

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Chapter:9

Oct 03, 2025

Goomba: "What da hell are you doing?"

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Chapter:8

Oct 03, 2025

Ah yes, hentai-sized titties. I've seen some that have a life of their own, so I can imagine how much they jiggle when she hammers. Also, Alexa, play 't Smidje.

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Chapter:7

Oct 03, 2025

We've got to have... money...

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Chapter:6

Oct 03, 2025

Plot armor can change the future.

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Chapter:5

Oct 03, 2025

Is this about to become a cosmic horror show?

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Chapter:4

Oct 03, 2025

Noticing improvement with the dialogue tags' variety so props for that. Still not a fan of them being separated by paragraph though. On that note, I'd also recommend trying to break up the paragraphs as most of them are really chunky.

How a Pink Diamond Talisman Turned Me from a Graduate Student into a Warrior Princess

Chapter:3

Oct 03, 2025

To:Mai

Real gamers press the "skip dialogue" button. If they're doing a speedrun that is.

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Our Town in another world

Chapter:9

Oct 03, 2025

To:Mai

That's right, you've got a Winona in your story. This one might even be more psychotic than yours.

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Our Town in another world

Chapter:8

Oct 03, 2025

Author's Commentary #581:

Time to talk about Chapter 581: The WWCF executive board.
Finally get to see these guys in action after they were first mentioned nearly 500 chapters ago. I originally didn't plan for them to have so many secretive elements though.

Originally, they were just going to meet in a normal board room, no creepy robes, and pretty much act like a typical board. The secrecy was a good play though, as now I don't need to create a bunch of new characters. One thing I'll mention is that Raymond technically can break the tie via his authority as WWCF president, however, he always refuses to do so. And if the result is a draw, the measure either gets tabled, revoted on, or handed back down to the normal board.

Finally, it looks like Mimoko and Iori will finally have a serious match against each other. Whether it will be unspoiled or not all depends on what Emmie does in her broadcast.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

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En Passant Grandmaster

Chapter:581

Oct 03, 2025

Hmm, go romance with horror.

Karina and Winona

Whispers Of The Mist

Chapter:5

Oct 03, 2025

And as promised, I finished this within the week. I'm going to echo the thoughts of others with this review. First off, it's nice to have an isekai deal with the escapism not actually leading to a better life, and I liked how you illustrated some of the darker and more morbid elements with it. I also liked how you were gutsy to have a moment where a character isn't saved by the heroes. Any other isekai and that guy would have been recruited to the party next chapter. However, as many have pointed out, Eshu was the weak link.

As Kaze mentioned, Eshu was here from the beginning. If she debuted here and not chapter 1, the sequel bait wouldn't have left such a sour taste. But this is a character who's been here since the beginning and sorely lacked character development. It's fine if she doesn't get too developed and remains a side character, but since she's a main character and one that'll seemingly have a major impact on the story, I feel her arc should have been the big finale for the volume.

I get you want to hype up a volume 2, but Eshu becoming interesting in the last few chapters with the story ending before she can fully be expanded upon left a sour taste. When she first started glitching out, I thought the final arc would focus on her, and complete the perfect trio for act 1: Sek, act 2: Ko, and then act 3: Eshu. Instead we got a stampede arc. I really think you should have tried to squeeze in Eshu's arc here instead of the stampede, maybe even cut out Mike entirely to make room for it as Eshu's plotline not being resolved is the biggest negative with the story for me.

Eshu rant over, you've definitely got some strong points with this story, notably the drones. I really liked their self-awareness and how deranged they could be. A far cry from some of the typical mindless enemies you find in typical isekais. Overall, I'd say your work is solid, but could have been better if you managed to squeeze Eshu's story in here. Congratulations on finishing and good luck with the contest.

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Our Perfect Isekai World is Spoiled by a Demon Girl?!

Chapter:40

Oct 03, 2025

Only one chapter to go? No, not when you've had Eshu do all this!

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Our Perfect Isekai World is Spoiled by a Demon Girl?!

Chapter:39

Oct 03, 2025

It really does suck for the enemies considering they know they can't win and want to run, but can't.

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Our Perfect Isekai World is Spoiled by a Demon Girl?!

Chapter:38

Oct 03, 2025

Dr. Wiley?

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Our Perfect Isekai World is Spoiled by a Demon Girl?!

Chapter:37