Sep 30, 2025
I'm honestly not sure of what to make of this chapter, but now, I have finished reading this story as promised. Out of all the stories in the contest, I think you've got one of the more unique concepts. It bears some similarities to Endo and Kobayashi Live! The Latest on Tsundere Villainess Lieselotte, though in that case, the main characters playing the game are able to communicate with a character and simply give him advice on how to get the good ending. That being said, there are some mixed feelings on it, especially after Rose was able to journey into the game herself. I feel that moment was where things really shifted as now the stakes were truly shown, but it also made me wonder if Ray could have game-overed earlier with Rose jumping into the game later.
While your concept is a unique twist on the game isekai genre, I do feel it's also a bit risky, as Ray not having any control over his body does detract from him a bit and makes him feel slightly less like a main character. The other big risk is having this also taking place in the real world for a good chunk of the story. Ordinarily, this wouldn't be an issue, but in regards to the contest, I don't know. Hoping for the best though as I feel the isekai genre is in dire need of more unique ideas to mix up the old stale formula. Not to mention, you had a character based off one of my stories, which gets automatic bonus points in my book. Crow-boy is best boy.
In regards to your other works, I feel I struggled the most to resonate with this one, but this is entirely a me thing. The writing quality is good as always, but prior to Crow-boy, I feel the story just wasn't quite my thing. Post Crow-boy, different story. I will rank this story above My personal warrior though, but I feel your other works outrank it on my personal list though. Others might have a different opinion though.
Apologies for all the notifications on the comments for this chapter. Every time I finish my post, I remember something I wanted to say and have to repost the post with the edits. This time, I think I have everything down. Congratulations on finishing and good luck with the contest.
