May 19, 2019
I feel like all of these side stories are gearing up for a nice plot reunion when things come together. The whole bit about the warring Tyrants was fun, especially the visuals of Mary Glow and her tribe; I could practically see the pop concert aesthetics! And whether it was meant to be humorous or not, I had to laugh at the transportable organist in Lord Xavion's platoon!
As for the blond man, I'm intrigued by what his role will be in this. His gauntlet is pretty cool, but it seems to have limitations. Also, that final scene with Bruno and Brody was kinda brutal!
I'd like to take this chance to help out by pointing out a couple of typos I noticed. The first one is when the blond man comes into this chapter, he places his hand on his abdomen over an old "would," which should probably be "wound." The second is after the hooligans split up, the blond man thinks of his wife, which is the only thing "spurning" him to go on, which I believe you meant "spurring," as "spurn" is a synonym for "scorn."
Lastly, I know what you mean by bouts of power-writing feeling like they take a toll. While that may be true, as a reader of this story from the beginning, I couldn't readily notice any detriments in prose quality, as you've improved since the earliest chapters. But take it from me...some time off to get in touch with non-writing stuff is always important! ;)
This was another fun chapter, and I apologize for falling so far behind on reading, although I never forgot about it.
