Jun 22, 2017
To:Jio Kurenai
First off, and I think I already said this, I'm flattered that you would use my work as a reference. I never thought anyone would learn from my own writing, but I feel more confident and proud of that.
That said, the advice was pretty spot on. I read a long time ago that adverbs were 'a joy-killer' in novels, but I thought it only implied on American novels, not light novels which description are so visible. But your point on using verbs instead really opened my eyes.
My descriptions, seriously, are like kryptonite for me. I can write down plot rather smoothly, but when it comes to creative descriptions, my writing becomes really rigid and straight to the point. If there was a way to help make descriptions slightly rewarding for readers, I would love some more insight on that.
The innuendos are from the... experience of watching numerous ecchi anime, and the idea of directly implying even the word itself is taboo for me. So I guess innuendos are my specialty (not like I meant to be good at it, it just sort of happened).
Again, thanks for taking the time to criticize while avoiding saying anything mean. That took a lot of thought and I appreciate that. I'll get to work on it immediately while I read the other novels here and see the fundamental differences with my own eyes. BTW, Vol. 5 of HEC is going very smoothly so far. Almost to the last chapter, and then I'm going to edit it using the advice you gave me.