Aug 02, 2021
Honestly, I liked this way more than I thought I would. Horror and slasher films are not things that I particularly am a fan of, in fact, I usually fall asleep while watching both. This, on the other hand, had me engaged from the beginning.
Starting with Jack, I really like the sense of humor he provides, along with his diction in general. He made me laugh out loud more than once, especially with the IRS joke. He feels really unique, and unlike most protagonists on this website, he feels full of life, and not bland.
You also do a great job handling tropes. I'm not super familiar with the normal tropes in slasher films, but this did a good job deconstructing some of the ones I do know, intentional or not.
This is one of the rare cases where I don't really have anything negative to say. This chapter knows what it is, and performs beautifully at it. The only thing I would really say is you may want to describe the scenery around you a tiny bit more.
Great job overall. Cant wait to read more. Good luck with the contest!
