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Fellow writer here. Long year fanfic author trying his hands at original stories. Hope you like my work.

registered at: Jun 12, 2023

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Jul 17, 2023

After surviving Koyori's initial attacks, Keiichi now takes a moment to reflect on many things but where to start? His mind is a mess and he can't even seem to understand his own emotions and feelings? Will he be able to sort everything out?

A bit of a change of tone after the comedy-heavy chapters we had but don't worry if you liked these they'll be back sooner than you might think. As always, thanks for your continued support! 👍

My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:11

Jul 17, 2023

Stan must have had an interesting past to have acted in such a manner. I'm not sure if the way you've tried to introduce this is a good one but I'm not experienced enough to come up with actual advice. Though there's one thing I can say with certainty. Sometimes I feel like the story lacks a sense of direction by which I mean that I'm not always able to understand why certain scenes and events take place, why certain characters are introduced and interacting in certain ways. Maybe I'm just dumb but that's the feeling I've been having for a while now and I thought I should mention it.

I still like your story, don't worry, it's one of very few I'm actually up to date with. I especially like Kiri and Stan. They're really cool characters and their interactions are always pretty funny. Moreover, they're both struggling, they're imperfect, they make mistakes. That makes them interesting after all. And they're gradually getting closer to each other again which is a promising sign for this story. Will they get back together soon? And will we learn more about their dark pasts? I can't wait to find out 👍

Escapism

Chapter:12

Jul 17, 2023

Sorry, I couldn't follow the action n this chapter at all.

Why does this Mark guy even remotely care about a guy who doesn't even go to his school? Why would he care about whatever the heck Kiri is doing who's not going to his school either? Who is Susan? I'm completely lost. Sorry for being honest.

Escapism

Chapter:10

Jul 17, 2023

To:SUZU

Hehe, yeah she saved him there 😂

My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:0

Jul 16, 2023

To:Geta

Those are some nice thoughts, Geta. I'm trying to keep spreading some little hints here and there until her backstory drops eventually. I'm really glad that they're obvious enough to be noticed yet subtle enough to not give anything away. Thanks for reading and commenting! 👍

My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:10

Jul 16, 2023

To:Geta

She slapped him very softly on the head 🤣

My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:9

Jul 15, 2023

Finally, chapter 10 has dropped!

Even Yori-chan tires out eventually, giving Keiichi some time to deal with his thoughts in the coming chapter. Hope you enjoy 👍

My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:10

Jul 14, 2023

To:Kaisei

Thanks lol xD

Yeah, I saw lots of people using eye-catching titles so I thought I'd gave this a try myself.

My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:9

Jul 14, 2023

To:Kaisei

You never know if she's saying what she's thinking 🤣

My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:8

Jul 12, 2023

To:Lei

Oh you're absolutely right, I can see how this confused you. I'll rewrite it to be more clear once my novel is finished, thanks for pointing this out 😅

My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:4

Jul 12, 2023

Posting a quick chapter today that sort of just wrote itself. Keiichi helps prevent an accident, however things don't go according to plan. 👀

My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:9

Jul 12, 2023

To:Geta

Oh I'm glad this came across properly lmao. Yeah he's having it rough right now xD

My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:8

Jul 12, 2023

To:Geta

Ah, I had to reread my chapter quickly to follow your train of thought. It's definitely not easy to understand a character like Koyori. With how silly she is, you'll never know when she's serious or just goofing around which also means you'll rarely ever know when she's playing with your feelings.

She's one of those characters who won't reveal the full depth of her character until much later and my focus on Keiichi doesn't allow me to look into her mind. For now, it's definitely not wrong to call her dense as she's not showing any signs of understanding Keiichi's nervousness. For now anyways.

About the acting part, yeah she does that occasionally like in chapter 8 and onward xD

My childhood friend ran away from home and now I have to share a room with her?!

Chapter:7

Jul 11, 2023

I read Ronald Weasley for a second there XD

The Youngest Court Mystic And the Mischievous Twin Princesses

Chapter:7

Jul 11, 2023

Just a small thing: Maybe try to make it a little more clear when you're jumping into the past for a flashback. Had me confused there for a few lines before I figured it out 😅

I won't lie, I think anyone would want to pat the heads of 5-year-old princesses, can't blame Edwin here haha. Really like the characterization of the royal family here, good job! 👍

The Youngest Court Mystic And the Mischievous Twin Princesses

Chapter:6

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