Oct 05, 2025
So it's ending on a cliffhanger... Review time. First up, I'll go over the main nitpick you're already ware of, being your poor scene transitions. You're already aware of that, so I'll move on to other things. The story itself is solid, however, in regards to the contest, it has two major flaws. First, it failed to reach the 50,000 word minimum. Second, this story can't really be called an isekai. I get that you desired to have this be an "anti-isekai" but if you wanted this to be a serious contender for the contest, I'm afraid that simply won't be possible. Tagging the story as an isekai might also be stretching it too as even if the world was a newly created one from a previous one, said world is essentially earth but with mythical beings and cataclysmic events. If the world was a fantasy one, with the characters being isekaid to it early on and then being given their powers, that would have worked.
Still, despite that, you did write over 40,000 words and finished before the deadline. Even if this means you are out of the contest, you should still take pride in the fact that you finished your first story. It also means you don't need to wait until the finalists are announced if you want to jump straight into volume 2 of this. I wish you the best for your future writing endeavors.
