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Momentie

Hi there,
This is the former home of my fiction - Unfortunately from drama, to a lack of innovation - To bugs that made the site unusable to me - My books are no longer being hosted here on here.

This in mind I'm leaving this note here to let people with an interest know you can find all my works in updated versions over on RoyalRoad & ScribbleHub - With plans for other releases yet to come.

For more info you can check out the final chapters of either 'UnderCurrent' or 'The Girl He Used to Know' - Which both depict my odd journey with this website😅.
HoneyFeed had its merits, it got me some feedback & I made some good friends here - But it is in effect the training wheels of web-noveling sites - If you are even slightly serious about your art or simply want a website that will teach you proper formatting & has an actual userbase - Then do yourself a favour, take off the training wheels & seek out the website that is right for you😊.

Best Regards,
-Momentie

registered at: Oct 14, 2021

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Jan 30, 2022

To:ocrali

Oh ya definitely some strong points!
And I agree the mystery is definitely one of the strong aspects - My feeling was more that the chapter lengths and mysterious plot make it hard for the reader to get their bearings - With that said it certainly isn't a necessarily bad thing, that sense of confusion and loss puts us in Yang's own shoes - So in that sense it's masterful!!😁😁

Further the fact that we can even have this discussion about the book and you have all the proof you need of how dense and nuaced a read it is, which is great (I'm kinda jealous of how good it is😂😁)😁😁.

CirCular

Chapter:13

Jan 30, 2022

I'm not looking forward to seeing what happens to these poor miners....😭😭

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:73

Jan 30, 2022

To:Momentie

Well more tea cups anyway😅

Avalon

Chapter:22

Jan 30, 2022

Lol, there gonna need new cutlery after all this training😂😅😂😅.

Avalon

Chapter:22

Jan 30, 2022

To:Cas_Cade

Hell ya! Your sleep has been a long one but now you must awaken!

😂😂Glad to be of help, and defo get back to writing, you got a whole lot of promising story here😉😉

CirCular

Chapter:13

Jan 30, 2022

To:ocrali

Thanks man!!

I honestly have no idea what I did to trigger it, none of my regular badges leveled up so seems kinda random😂😂 - But anyways I'm enjoying that glorius gold gold😁😅.

CirCular

Chapter:10

Jan 30, 2022

Wha,ah, but-- wah ahm..... God damn!!!😂😂.

What an ending! I'm usually one for long reviews but I got nothing to say other then awesome!😂😁.

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.......... Well maybe a few things😉😉.

Negatives;
I've mentioned before but the early chapters are looooong as heck, which is cool except when they then get abruptly shorter - It sorta does strange things to the stories pacing ya know?

Further periodically I did get confused on certain plot points (i.e. Jyn actually has a brother!? And the whole confusion over which Yang this was).

Finally the plot can sometimes feel a little direction-less with nothing but "get home" as the goal - At first each door of the mansion explored gives a sense of progression but once the iseaki part starts you do sorta lose that progress 👍👍.

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The positives;
Your prose is very engaging, first person can be....tricky😅.
Alot of the time all first person narration ends up having less to do with the characters, and more just becomes the writers mouth piece - You on the other hand do it amazingly!😄😊😉👍

The different perspectives all feel unique and colourful and the narration style changes in small ways to match Yang current state of sanity - Really brillaint stuff with even the "[]" boxes becoming something I actually quite liked!

The story is sufficiently mysterious to hold my attention, the world-building is fun and the characters all feel strong - Especially the seven dwarfs, love those guys.

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So ya really great work! Can't wait to see arc/volume/book(?) 2,

- Momentie😊👍.

CirCular

Chapter:13

Jan 30, 2022

Ah wait now I'm confused - I thought Yang was who Jyn brought in? And that Jyn was pretending Yang was her brother?!

Now I feel dumb lol

CirCular

Chapter:12

Jan 30, 2022

Damn I love these guys, the seven dwarfs are all joint best boy.

Also this is my favourite chapter so far, really great bond between the gang and interesting world-building - Great stuff!😊

CirCular

Chapter:11

Jan 30, 2022

To:ocrali

Ohhhh I like that idea!
I need to pay more attention for clues like that 😂.

CirCular

Chapter:10

Jan 30, 2022

To:Hans Trondheim

Oh ya HoneyFeed is a pretty lackluster site for author support😅 - But damn that's super impressive that your writing and drawing your own book at once!
You don't happen to take drawing commissions by any chance?

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That's a dedicated writing regime, hearing the amount of work put in makes me want to read it all even more!
Good on ya😊

The Human Saint is Bored, so I was Summoned to Another World Vol. 1

Chapter:0

Jan 30, 2022

K loved the last chapter, especially the demon king fainting on his legs😂, that got me good 😅.

But this one's wayyyyyy long😂😅, plus ya know, eleven volumes😅 - So I shall add your book to the list and come back soon once I finish one of the other long books round here - Looking foward to it😊😊👍👍.

The Human Saint is Bored, so I was Summoned to Another World Vol. 1

Chapter:1

Jan 30, 2022

Oh crap I saw the "volume 11" tag on your newest book and lo&behold you really do have a dozen books on!!!!

How the heck do you write so much, I'm in awe😂😁.

Also who does your covers? There awesome!

The Human Saint is Bored, so I was Summoned to Another World Vol. 1

Chapter:0

Jan 30, 2022

That description of marriage was glorious 😂😂😅😅

The Demon Saint is Missing, so I Ran to Another World Vol. 11

Chapter:0

Jan 30, 2022

To:ACHIEVE

Ohhhhh I see, my bad then - Lots more sisters to meet in the future😂😂.

Dance of Thorns

Chapter:28