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Hi there,
This is the former home of my fiction - Unfortunately from drama, to a lack of innovation - To bugs that made the site unusable to me - My books are no longer being hosted here on here.

This in mind I'm leaving this note here to let people with an interest know you can find all my works in updated versions over on RoyalRoad & ScribbleHub - With plans for other releases yet to come.

For more info you can check out the final chapters of either 'UnderCurrent' or 'The Girl He Used to Know' - Which both depict my odd journey with this website😅.
HoneyFeed had its merits, it got me some feedback & I made some good friends here - But it is in effect the training wheels of web-noveling sites - If you are even slightly serious about your art or simply want a website that will teach you proper formatting & has an actual userbase - Then do yourself a favour, take off the training wheels & seek out the website that is right for you😊.

Best Regards,
-Momentie

registered at: Oct 14, 2021

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Feb 22, 2022

To:Grandloaf

Seemed fine to me, didn't notice any tense issues this chapter😊👍

Magical Pom Pom

Chapter:4

Feb 22, 2022

Our boy has a.... Troubling childhood😅😅.

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The idea that he's jeolous of the trap-boy Is one thing - But the level of adoration he has for Pommy is bordering on phychotic😅 - I get it, waifu prompt and all that but a bedspread and wall clock?
Someone call a councilor 😂😂.

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Great ending paragraph 😁👍.

Magical Pom Pom

Chapter:2

Feb 22, 2022

Is he having a male period of is 'heat' more like, well the 'heat' animals have?👍👍

And again it'd be great to know what the butler actually looks like😂😂.

Our Sweet Days

Chapter:7

Feb 22, 2022

Damn Luna is MVP 😅😁, well her or the overlord itself😂😂.

Dance of Thorns

Chapter:36

Feb 19, 2022

To:Ochroleucous

Ah I hear ya, I use pretty much the same system for UnderCurrent - No shame in it😁😎.

I feel your pain, story original words are always a pain to keep fresh in the readers mind😭😶.

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:84

Feb 19, 2022

Just one chapter left!
What a long journey eh?

But one question plagues me more then any of the eassys I've left on the last few chapters....

You er... You gonna address rugul anytime soon or is our assassin boi MIA from the epilogue and finally?😅😅😅😅

The Isekai Police: Promise of a Wonderful Fantasy was a Lie

Chapter:61

Feb 19, 2022

Overall another nice chapter, which echoes the point I made about themes, last chapter😊👍.

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I will add going back to my comment 3 chapters ago - That Tommy's hero moment being so humiliatingly bad, kinda undercuts the pay-off in this chapter, which is a shame as I like the actual sentiment presented here.

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Finally I do think it would be nice to have a little more on Tommy's feelings, espically considering the emphasis on 'What happens next' - Ya know, he doesn't mention his new world parents at any point😅, and it seems one good night's sleep allowed him to get over the partial manslaughter of his 4 long-term lovers.....

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But again, in general a pretty good chapter😊👍.

The Isekai Police: Promise of a Wonderful Fantasy was a Lie

Chapter:60

Feb 19, 2022

I love the ever-so slight sassy beurocracy of the guides narrator and his countinues insistence on not joing debates😂😂.

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Question - Are the names made-up like you say in your comment below or do you use a guideline?
I.e. using words from languages other then English or refering to a self-made language/language rules of your own devising?

Either way, I really like how each word has a different culture and in-universe meaning, tho I'm not sure how easy it'll be to remember which type does what😅🤔.

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Adan's ability sounds more and more glorius - I think I mentioned before that I used to run a stores-yard before the covids. In this capacity one of many things I was in charge of was both the health & safety of the place and keeping the place stocked with safety equipment of all kinds - Put lightly Adan's power was made for me and I love it😍😍😂😂

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:84

Feb 19, 2022

Damn I'm loving this chapter.

The king is really great in his quick writing, you have a good talent for rapid characterisation - Plus the war room stuff is nicely handled, with actual planing and discussions(something new fantasy authors sometimes forget to do😅 but I'd say you aced it with a nice mix of exposition, and character building😁).

Really solid chapter once again😊👍.

The Wolf Among Rats (Old)

Chapter:9

Feb 19, 2022

To:DarkerMahogany

Unrelated questions but 1. I second everything in your bio, glad to know I'm not the only one who feels that way.

And 2. What's that 'community' badge for😶😶.

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Oh and nice grammer tips 😂😊

Magical Pom Pom

Chapter:1

Feb 19, 2022

You've got a talent for this slight so-real one shots - Really good stuff😊👍

An Empty Chair

Chapter:1

Feb 19, 2022

To:Deleted User

Some day buddy😉 - Thanks for reading!😊

The Girl He Used To Know - Original HoneyFeed Version

Chapter:5

Feb 18, 2022

Let me start by saying that I don't like reviewing on something I haven't finished - And yet I have commented Alot on this book at many different stages - So many comments I'm not even sure you've seen em all 😂😂.

In all honesty I'm tempted to give this my full anime critic threatment, gather up all my comments and write up a proper review like I would for any show I watched.

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I bring this up, as while I voiced massive issues with the war of the armies 4(?) Chaps back and had conflicting feelings on the 'final 5/5', chapters - What this epilogue makes really clear is a theme.

And that's the theme (I presume atleast😅) of 'What happens After'.

It's a great theme that runs really well throughout the whole book.

What happens after the village is pillaged by the demon lord - What happens after kobald crossing is cleared out - What happens after the goddess banished the old pantheon - What happens after Cessen beats the evil lord. -- And maybe most of all, what happens after the hero is summoned and draged away from their old lives and homes.

But further you tie it wonderfully with anthryoms arc of running away - He runs away from the NPC's, from Saes party, the village, even the heros party in a sense and almost from Neithra.

Ending the novel with a deep dive of what happens after the goddess is beat, with anthryoms final facing the 'story after the story' is superb.

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There's alot to say about this book, I really might just write that proper review, but I just want to say that regardless of anything else - The theme of;
'What happens After' is absolutely brillaint and my favourite part of the whole novel, very well done😊😊👍👍.

The Isekai Police: Promise of a Wonderful Fantasy was a Lie

Chapter:59

Feb 18, 2022

This guy really though ahead, I like it😁.

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On the robo-butler, I think it might be good to properly describe it soon - I'd love to know if it has a little robot serving suit or something😂😂

Our Sweet Days

Chapter:4

Feb 17, 2022

Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm.

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I'll save my final thoughts for after the epilogue but in regards to this chapter I'm mixed.

- The godess crystal thing at the end feels Uber rushed and lazy, no two ways about it.
I thought maybe Neithra would lead the army on a quest to remove the taint or something but no, just punch a friggin crystal lol😅😅.

- On a side note, I guess the mystery over Neithra's intelligence ultimately Equaled.... Nothing, she was just so uber smart that even under the taint she was smart😅🤔?

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Final battle is decent enough.
For everything I like in it, you do something I don't like;

- Tommy stepping up to be hero? Great - Him immediately being made an innocpentant retard with a useless sword? Not so great....

Anthryom developing to thrust the future to the NPC's? Awesome!
Anthryom surviving completely uninjured with no consequences or call out for planting C4 on Neithra? Not so great....

(Also if his layors of mega armour and clouths got burned off, then why not his phone? Is it a classic 'tank-proof' Nokia 210?!😅😂).

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Ya all told I'm between minds. Not sure if you saw my long comment from two chapters ago but the battle of the army's - Absolutely your worst work.

Contrastingly I think the harpy stuff is for the most part pretty good and makes for a decent final battle.

I'm also just mixed on what you were aiming for with some things.
Did you write the villians with the intention of them being pulpy one note schemers - Or were they meant to be taken seriously?
Cuase I can say now after the Toal arc, I at no point feared for anyone on the side of goods, life's.....
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I'll think on it a-bit more and read the epilogue, after that I guess I'll see how it all pays off by the end😊👍.

The Isekai Police: Promise of a Wonderful Fantasy was a Lie

Chapter:57