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Mario Nakano 64

It's a me. I'm an aspiring light novel writer hoping to one day see my works in anime form. I hope that my works at least brighten up your day and give you something to look forward to.

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Nov 09, 2025

Looks like he impressed her.

Kyslicium

Chapter:14

Nov 09, 2025

That's right... she breathed oxygen. It really does feel weird hearing oxygen breathing be portrayed as so taboo considering the world we live in revolves around it.

Kyslicium

Chapter:13

Nov 09, 2025

Hadn't even considered the possibility of Kael messing up.

Kyslicium

Chapter:12

Nov 09, 2025

Play Avengers theme.

Kyslicium

Chapter:11

Nov 09, 2025

Can't say I'm a fan of skipping to the end of the game. Sometimes it works, but I feel you need to show a bit more chess first. If you ever decide to continue this, I hope you take some of my critiques into consideration.

Chess Madness

Chapter:3

Nov 09, 2025

To:kazesenken

Oh yeah, I hadn't even thought about that. Are you thinking about something more in-line with the present art, or something different? Personally, I like the general style of your characters, so my vote would be for something similar to it, but this decision is ultimately yours to make.

Limelight Blight

Chapter:1

Nov 09, 2025

OK, this is where I'm going to get very critical. Whenever a chess game is featured, my philosophy is that every move needs to be shown. The reason for that is without it, the game becomes hard to follow. You started out well with the King's Gambit, but then you run into trouble after move three. Based on what you described, the game goes 1. e4 e5 2. f4 exf4 3. Nf3 Bc5. At this point, the student is in a better position. The problem is that you then say the teacher then places his knight on f6, without saying where the student moved on move 4. My assumption is that the student would go 4. d4, but that means that if the teacher goes 4... Nf6, he loses a bishop. Then you jump around to move 12 and I'm completely lost. You had a great game going, but since it wasn't coherent, it was hard to follow. For me, if a chess game is not easy to follow, it ruins the experience for me.

Chess Madness

Chapter:2

Nov 09, 2025

I'm guessing he'll join in the end.

Kyslicium

Chapter:10

Nov 09, 2025

Now that's convenient.

Kyslicium

Chapter:9

Nov 09, 2025

He definitely knows something. Also, sorry it's taken me so long to come back and read this. I've been wanting to finish it, but just haven't had the time, but now I do.

Kyslicium

Chapter:8

Nov 09, 2025

Slumps are a thing in professional chess. Even the 2700s have them.

Chess Madness

Chapter:1

Nov 09, 2025

To:obliviousbushtit

Thanks for checking this out. I also like the acronym. Makes it easy to remember.

Limelight Blight

Chapter:1

Nov 09, 2025

To:Taylor J

More like got all of reddit to attend his school.

Our Town in another world

Chapter:31

Nov 09, 2025

To:Taylor J

Just gotta go through a few death loops. Nothing hard.

Our Town in another world

Chapter:30

Nov 09, 2025

To:Taylor J

Never been a fan of charred food myself, but hey, we all got different tastes.

Our Town in another world

Chapter:29

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